Prompt:
...I could see the finish line, then...
...I could see the finish line, then...
The engine roared as I steadily forced my foot down on the accelerator. I surged past the competitor in 1st place. I was going 250 kilometers per hour. I heard the commentator say, “Car 21 is in the lead, but followed closely by Car 16.” I could hear the engine of Car 16. He was close. Panic rushed through me. I could see the finish line, then my car started to roll, flipping upside down. A ringing noise pierced through my ears as my head slammed against the side of the car. Car 16 roared past me. I had lost.
~ Emily
From the start I can tell this race is going to be interesting I like the use of the word 'roared' it shows just how loud the car is. You've used some great descriptive words throughout and I like how you've also described your emotions it makes me feel more involved as a reader. Well done!
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